Liang Jiangtao took out the speech he carefully drafted yesterday and read it from beginning to end.
To be honest, Zhou Mi was very well written.
It is magnificent, has clear logical ideas, sufficient arguments, detailed content, and a certain degree of literary talent.
No matter from which angle you look at it, it can be used as sample material.
But that doesn't mean it's perfect.
Materials are never perfect.
Since ancient times, there has been no first in literature and no second in martial arts.
Of course, people who write materials pursue the most beautiful structure, the best angle of entry, the most accurate wording, the richest and most detailed information, and the most profound thoughts, but there is always a more symmetrical structure, a more clever angle, and a more vivid one. Words, more specific data support, and more profound thoughts.
It's like cutting a piece of rope in two, it can never be completely divided.
Another thing, this is just a first draft, there is room for revision later.
The material is like this. From the first draft to the final draft, it has to go through a long polishing process.
In this process, Liang Jiangtao can and must give opinions. He has to show himself.
If typing last night gave Zhou Mi a surprise, giving comments on the materials today is even more crucial, allowing Zhou Mi to realize his value more clearly!
After all, the laboratory relies on materials to speak for itself.
Liang Jiangtao is a writer, not a typist, and he knows this very well.
He wanted to prove to Zhou Mi that he could write the material and write it well!
Liang Jiangtao read the material carefully from beginning to end, his brain spinning rapidly, and he used a pencil to draw and write from time to time, thinking carefully.
Treat every possible mistake like an enemy.
The more Liang Jiangtao looked at it, the more he felt that Zhou Zhou's material was of a very high standard. It was difficult for him to provide major opinions such as viewpoints, structure, and data arrangement in a short period of time, and it was inconvenient to do so. However, he could provide at least ten opinions on small details.
Except for two flaws in these details, the rest can be changed or not. If they are changed, they will be more perfect. There are also one or two things that are better if they are changed from Liang Jiangtao's point of view. There is still a discussion on whether they need to be changed. The space contains personal writing habits.
If Liang Jiangtao's previous temperament was based on, he would have raised these ten points no matter what, but he changed after his rebirth.
He thought of what an old leader said to him in his previous life: "Everyone writes the materials with painstaking efforts, just like their own children. You can give your opinions, but you must pay attention to the methods. No one wants their materials to be criticized by others." Useless.”
"Of course you have to mention the flaws, otherwise the writer will still be criticized if the leader finds out. This is real help, and no one will refuse it. As for what can be changed or not, you have to be careful. A question of whether a material can be changed or not. Mention up to three, and only the three that you are most sure of, and don’t mention more than three.”
At that time, Liang Jiangtao disagreed with this and felt that the old leader was pedantic. If you have something to say, you must say it and if you have opinions, you must raise it. Only by fully discussing and colliding can the materials be perfect.
Now that I think about this again, I feel that it makes perfect sense.
Pick up an eraser and erase a few comments that may or may not be changed. This will also give some space to other people who have made comments.
"Okay, Xiaoliang, it's quite early."
Around 9:00, Zhou Mi came in and saw Liang Jiangtao working at his desk. He nodded and said with a smile.
"Good morning, Zhou Chu. Anyway, I live nearby. If you have nothing to do in the morning, just come to the unit." Liang Jiangtao said with a smile.
"Print four copies of yesterday's materials, give me one, and then take it to Hanyang and the others. Let's touch it later."
"Okay." Liang Jiangtao acted upon hearing the order and finished it quickly.
After a while, Zhou Mi called them over.
"Everyone has read yesterday's materials. Do you have any opinions? Tell us." Zhou Mi said.
The original draft of this material was drafted separately by Zhou Hanyang, Ning Bin, and Huang Min. Now it has been completely changed, and Zhou Mi has basically not used a word.
Several people read the current manuscript, but they were all convinced.
Compared with sophisticated materials, theirs is garbage.
Their level was too low, and they all lowered their heads and couldn't say anything. That is to say, Zhou Hanyang tried to mention something. It was one of Liang Jiangtao's points that could be changed or not, but it was something he was not prepared to say.
After hearing this, Zhou Mi pondered for a moment and said, "Let's just leave it as it is here and won't change it."
A few people even stopped talking.
Zhou Mi said: "Jiang Tao, do you have any opinions? If you have any, just say it boldly."
Liang Jiangtao paused after hearing this and said, "Zhou Chu, I have studied this material carefully and I have some questions that I would like to ask you."
"Oh? Tell me." Zhou Mi encouraged him. He hoped that Liang Jiangtao would speak. It doesn't matter if he said something wrong. Everyone will make mistakes when they start, and making mistakes is to accumulate experience for success, which is a good thing.
On the contrary, if you are afraid of making mistakes and do not dare to speak or communicate, then you will hesitate to move forward and become complacent without making any progress. This will lead to bad things.
"There is a sentence in the second paragraph of page 1, 'In addition to the new organization ministers of each county and city, the students in this training class will also participate in the training'."
"The new organization director of the county and city is both the object of the sentence and the subject of the study. It seems to be a mixed sentence. It is recommended to remove the 'students' after 'training class'."
"The revised sentence reads, 'In addition to the new organization ministers of each county and city, six new cadres from the Organization Department of the Provincial Party Committee will also participate in this training class.'" Liang Jiangtao said.
Zhou Mi's eyes lit up. This was an obviously wrong sentence. He had already discovered it. Unexpectedly, Liang Jiangtao also noticed it. He analyzed it grammatically thoroughly, explained it clearly, and revised it beautifully.
From this point of view, we can see that Liang Jiangtao’s writing skills are very good!
Writing ability is the last thing you can fake.
Basically, you can tell in three sentences whether you can write and how well you write.
"Very good! Do you have any more?" Zhou Mi encouraged.
"There is also the second paragraph on page 3. The white spoon's' should be changed to double's'." Liang Jiangtao pointed to another one and said.
It is still very easy to make the mistake of using the words "de", "de" and "di" incorrectly. This is also a flaw. Zhou Mi immediately realized that Liang Jiangtao was right and said: "Very good, we need to change it here. Is there anything else?"
"Paragraph 3 on page 5, 'a total of 25 mobile party branches have been established', it is recommended to change it to 'a total of 25 mobile party branches have been established' and put the quantifier at the end. Of course, this place can be changed or not."
Zhou Mi was silent, and when he looked at Liang Jiangtao, his eyes were different. Although this aspect could be changed or not, Liang Jiangtao's suggestion was obviously better.
Putting the quantifier at the back makes it more concise and more powerful to read.
Zhou Zhou knows this, but he often doesn't pay attention when writing the first draft, and then changes it based on his sense of language when polishing the manuscript.
He did not summarize and refine the understanding that "quantifiers should always be placed at the back".
This is so practical!
With this understanding, I’m afraid there will never be any problems in this area in the future!
