The political commissar was at a loss for words.
His cultural level is not high. Although he can detect the flaws in the script, he cannot see through them exactly where they are.
He thought for a long time and finally said, "You have all watched "Taking Tiger Mountain by Wisdom", "Assault on the White Tigers" and "Shajiabang", right? What do you think?"
"It looks good, of course it looks good." Everyone nodded.
"When you watched it for the first time, after watching one scene, did you want to watch the next one, and didn't want to leave until you finished watching it?" the political commissar asked again.
Everyone nodded again.
In dramas such as "Taking Tiger Mountain by Wisdom", "Assault on the White Tigers" and "Shajiabang", the enemies are insidious and cunning, and the situation is complicated and exciting. Even if you have watched it many times and are familiar with the plot, they still act the same at those joints. I will sweat a lot. Worried about the protagonist, cursed the villain with bad luck, and refused to leave until he saw the final victory.
"Our script lacks the power to catch people." The political commissar immediately said, "After watching the first scene, people will not be interested in watching the second scene."
Xiao Suizi, Hao Shuwen, Zhu Ke and Chen Can were all disappointed when they heard this.
They all thought the script was quite good, with real characters and a touching story. It showed the deeds of heroes and models well, and they didn’t understand what the political commissar was dissatisfied with.
"Why, are you discouraged?" When the political commissar saw it, he said displeasedly, "Which of those successful works was written and rewritten, revised and revised, and finally polished. You will fail once, and that's it. With this look, do you still have any fighting spirit?!"
"Political commissar, let's take it back and change it." Hao Shuwen had no choice but to say, but she had no idea how to change it.
"Yeah." The political commissar nodded.
…
After getting the script back, they returned to the creative room. Several people looked at each other, a little at a loss.
"I think this script is pretty good. How should I change it?" Hao Shuwen frowned and said, "Xiao Suizi, do you have any ideas?"
"If I have an idea, I've said it a long time ago. There's no need to wait until now." Xiao Suizi waved her hand.
"Chen Can, Zhu Ke, where are you two?" Hao Shuwen asked again.
Chen Can and Zhu Ke also shook their heads.
"I knew I couldn't point the finger at you." Hao Shuwen curled her lips and said, "Liu Feng, what do you think?"
"I just have some vague ideas, which are very immature. I didn't say anything before." Xiang Nan said modestly.
"Let's talk about it if it's immature. We don't have anything yet." Hao Shuwen heard this and quickly asked for advice.
"Yes, immaturity is better than nothing." Xiao Suizi also agreed.
"Tell me, no matter how immature it is, it's still an idea." Chen Can also said, "Take it out and let's discuss it. Maybe it will be done."
"Yes, if the script is not well written, everyone will lose face, so don't be too cautious." Zhu Ke also said, pointing to it for meritorious service.
"Then I will tell you briefly." Xiang Nan nodded, "The political commissar is right, our script is immature. It just moved the deeds of heroes and models to the stage without any in-depth artistic processing.
Moreover, one scene has one story, five scenes have five stories, and there is no connection between them. There was no ambush or knotting, so the audience had no desire to continue watching.
As for "Assault on the White Tigers" and "Taking Tiger Mountain by Wisdom", the scenes are connected with each other, and there are buttons at the end of each scene, so that the audience has to look down. "
Hearing what he said, everyone nodded.
The problems Xiang Nan mentioned do exist objectively.
It was their first time writing a script and they had little creative experience. Therefore, the deeds of the heroes and models were brought to the screen, and the scenes were reenacted.
There is no artistic processing, no character creation, and no story arrangement. It is actually very boring. However, their level of art appreciation is low, so they didn't notice it. Instead, they thought they wrote very well.
"Then what do you think should be changed?" Xiao Suizi asked.
"I think we should change it like this..." Xiang Nan smiled and then put forward his own idea.
…
Xiang Nan's idea is that the protagonists are two people, one is a new recruit who has just joined the army, and the other is a veteran known as Living Thunder Peak.
The new recruits have just joined the army, are immature in thinking, lazy in training, undisciplined, lack faith, and are selfish. As the squad leader, the veteran taught him patiently, but the recruit refused to listen and refused to change despite repeated teachings.
During a training session to throw grenades, the recruits became impatient, made mistakes, and were in danger. At the critical moment, the veteran stepped forward bravely to save him, but he was injured.
The recruit then felt remorseful and went to the hospital in person to apologize. In the hospital, he saw veterans giving subsidies to help poor sick patients, which deeply touched him.
Inspired by the veterans, the recruits began to reform their minds, trained hard, were willing to help others, and grew into excellent soldiers. In the end, in order to protect the country's property, the veteran was injured and died in a duel with gangsters. The recruits took over the burden of the veterans and became the new Living Thunder Peak.
In this way, there is not only dramatic conflict, but also character growth, and a sense of passing on the fire from generation to generation.
…
After listening to Xiang Nan's story, Hao Shuwen, Xiao Suizi, Chen Can, and Zhu Ke were all stunned and did not recover for a long time.
An expert will know if there is one as soon as he takes action.
Xiang Nan's script has a beginning and an end, echoes from front to back, vivid characters, and twists and turns in the story. It's really good. Compared to their script, it's really much better.
"Liu Feng, you are so awesome. You should change your profession and become a writer." Xiao Suizi said with admiration.
"Liu Feng, didn't you say that you never went to school, but you still learned how to read in the army? How could you make up such a good story?" Hao Shuwen also said in surprise.
Chen Can smiled mysteriously, not surprised.
He had previously guessed that Liu Feng was probably the son of a certain leader. In order to avoid unnecessary trouble, he hid in the art troupe incognito.
Just like him, he is a big soldier in name, but who would have thought that his father is the deputy commander of the military region. Liu Feng had hidden things better than him before, so it was likely that his relatives had a higher status.
It’s not surprising that a young man like this can write songs and plays.
"Don't forget, I studied at the Bangzi Theater Company before, and I had nothing else to do every day but study opera." Xiang Nan smiled slightly and made an excuse for himself, "So, I know how to rehearse and act, maybe Just be sensitive.”
"So that's it." After hearing his explanation, everyone was not surprised.
Working in the theater every day, it shouldn't be surprising that he knows a thing or two. Just like the people in the art troupe who pull up the curtain, manage the costumes and pipes, they watch every day and can sing and dance.
"If you think my story is okay, then let's hurry up and write it." Xiang Nan said again.
When everyone heard this, they immediately nodded and started writing.
Because Xiang Nan had already given an outline, it was much easier to write, and the second version of the script was released two days later.
