Previous chapter has been revised + results reported

After reading some comments on the previous chapter, I was very confused. Some people said that it wrote about the differences between immortals and mortals, and the warmth and coldness of human relationships. It was well written. Some people said that the Holy Mother... the latter made the author confused.

After spending most of the day repairing it, I first removed the leftover food boxes for the children. After thinking about it, I simply removed the protagonist's speech and replaced it with Carrot Head. Later, I simply changed it to Carrot Head and let the other party leave directly.

And the nickname of Brother Qiao was removed and changed to "Brother Yu". This was originally intended to be about Brother Qiao being ignorant and being influenced by his wife. But it is obvious that the author's writing skills are not strong enough and things are progressing too slowly. What the readers see is different from what the author thinks. It is better to change it to black and white, which is more suitable for readers.

If you have practiced everything you can, your perception will be much better.

In fact, Mr. Fang has made this kind of plot problem before. Now I realize again that character interaction is really difficult to write. In addition to the villain's malicious intentions, the protagonist's good intentions should not be shown casually, even to children. Learn the lesson, learn the lesson!

In fact, Cuckoo also knows that the best way to avoid such things that are easy to touch poisonous spots is not to touch them, that is, not to touch the characters. If you don’t touch the characters, there will naturally be no problems with characters’ temperament or misunderstanding.

But obviously, this is laziness. If one character clicks into another, the author will not grow and the relationships between the characters will not be enriched. There is a reason why Cuckoo has so many characters.

Everything that can be cultivated has been cultivated, and Cugu is not an author who is stubborn. Moreover, if readers have opinions, it probably means there is a problem with the author's technique, which also serves as a catalyst.

As for the rest, except that it seems to be divided into two chapters, which is a bit watery, there should be no problem (it was originally intended to be combined into one chapter of 4,000 words, but it cannot be operated after it is put on the shelf).

Cuckoo was confused for a long time, and thought that it would be no problem to start with the characters. The charterer did not appear suddenly. Her appearance of taking her son to have a meal was also accompanied by a small pretentious plot, and It's not just foreshadowing.

The problem should be the heat, so the rest of the story has to be based on Cuckoo’s own ideas. The only thing that can be spoiled is that the charter woman did not end well, she has good things...

Let me report the results. The first chapter has been released and 5,100 people have subscribed.

Thank you very much everyone!

This is Cuckoo’s unprecedented good result!

The improvement of performance is inseparable from everyone’s support, tips and reminders. Cuckoo will continue to write with heart, and hope to continue to make progress. Thank you all!