Finished another copy.
Yeah.
Finally he breathed a sigh of relief.
I’ll write it after the settlement.
I will still say what needs to be said, and I hope book readers can subscribe and buy it.
Subscriptions are the whip that drives the antenna forward.
Snapped! Snapped! Snapped! shelf!
Then I chat with everyone on a daily basis. Today, I mainly talk about the shortcomings I found in this dungeon.
[The following content contains serious spoilers from the copy. Readers who have not read the copy and intend to read it, please do not continue reading. 】
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For this copy, unlike before, I am not very satisfied with it. It is a passable story at best, but not excellent.
Because when I was writing the copy in the middle and late stages, and still in the process of writing, I found that I could write better in handling many details, and these details could no longer be modified in the middle stage, so they evolved into what I had in mind. Spinule.
I kept regretting it later on, why did I write it like this in the first place? Wouldn't it be better to write it this way? Was his brain like Watt at that time? Why is it that the bitch I committed half a month ago is torturing me now?
Now I will list the points that I think can be improved.
One: Regarding the dungeon setting and information, in some cases it can be presented in a more authoritative way, and if it is a prerequisite for decryption, the best way is to display it in the early stage.
In this dungeon, the information about the Demon King was told to Lin Li through the mouths of Nobita and the Space-Time Patrol. There was a problem. This information was not known all at once, but was obtained slowly during the process.
The sooner this kind of information is given, the more fun readers will have when the secret is finally revealed, whether they guessed it right or wrong. For example, regarding the method of replacing persons, I feel that it was written too late, and the secret was revealed after a few chapters.
The solution I'm thinking of now is to use more props like magical conches, or if necessary, when the male protagonist enters the dungeon and assumes the role, use the system to tell a lot of authoritative information first like a script kill.
sorry!
Second: The focus of the character is a bit biased, and it is easy to misplace expectations.
The main characters in this dungeon are the Time Patrol, Nobita, and the Demon King.
But the problem is that the Patrol and the Demon King can be understood as derivative new characters. What everyone wants to see is the interaction with the familiar children from childhood, Fat Tiger and the others, but I wrote less about them. This is also one of my problems. Will pay more attention to it later.
sorry!
Third: The text description skills are not enough, the copy seems a bit messy, and I am really a big waste when it comes to fighting.
The text describes that this is mainly reflected in the explanation of 'person' and 'time discontinuity', but part of the reason is because it involves God, which will be drawn out and explained formally later.
sorry!
Fourth: The details are not handled well.
Kameda's letter was super superfluous. He used Lin Li's brain to deduce the chronological order. This was really a decryption of what should be written.
The purpose of that letter was to further break the relationship between the system and the dungeon at the end. There was no need for me to write out the chronological order. I could just write some Kameda to tease Lin Li and agree to meet.
I was such a fool that day. I realized this problem very early, and I felt something was wrong even after I posted it. I regretted it so much, oh, my stupid groundhog.
I'm so sorry!
Fifth: Responsible for the climax of the ending, this time it almost didn't make sense.
When I write that I don't feel very good and smooth, like having diarrhea, I am already miserable in advance.
The process of taking out Doraemon's outrageous props to torture the Demon King in reverse, this fighting part, one word evaluation: la la la la la la la la la la!
I will no longer focus on this part of the climax, but will change it in other ways.
sorry!
Sixth: In fact, the copy selection is not good.
"Doraemon" is too deep, and I can't control it...
The absurdities and paradoxes of this world make it difficult to be logically self-consistent. This actually caused great difficulties for my creation. Some places were forcibly rounded out for the sake of this world.
In a one-unit drama, you are not responsible for taking out the props and using them, and do not consider the paradoxes between the props at all. But when you write it, there will definitely be readers who will criticize it.
Why not use XXX? This is obviously possible at this time...
So I banned time-based BUG props from the beginning, and asked the Demon King to pretend that the props were damaged...
But this is still a problem that arises in my dungeon selection after all. I need to be more careful when choosing dungeons later.
sorry!
Seventh: The idea cannot be changed, it is easy to change.
When I wrote about the luxury flashlight, I found that the comment section had already seen the reminder of living things. My pupils were shaking: So what I thought was foreshadowing was actually an enlargement of the face?
So in order to unlock more surprises, I could only start to make amends and reduce the plot of 'Doraemon'.
This also led to another impact. I did not write about the plot of the tenth member of the patrol.
Originally he was supposed to be another smoke bomb, but I missed it and mentioned it with just a few strokes. I really deserve to die...
Even if everyone guesses it next time, I will still bite the bullet and write!
sorry!
Eight: Regarding the entire book, I haven’t summoned a new character for a long time, and maybe everyone has missed it.
In fact, what I initially imagined was that this dungeon would have a "summon" - Doraemon, but after all, this is not a collision between characters with different styles, and it feels almost boring to write it.
I'm aware of this, and will note later, that a rather outrageous experience character should be summoned during the overworld, as well as new permanent characters.
sorry!
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There are still some problems, but I won’t list them one by one. I have already regretted almost two thousand words.
I'm not afraid of problems, I'm just afraid that I haven't found any problems. If you have any bad points, you can comment on this article, and I will like it to show that I saw it (be gentle, please be considerate).
Although I wrote over a million words before writing this book, it is not the same type of book at all, so I can still be considered a new author, and I should be more tolerant and loving.
Now I want to play new things in each copy, and it is normal to have problems, but I hope that I can continue to make progress, gain wisdom from each step, and write better stories.
The disadvantages and benefits of copy flow are all here. Every copy is a new starting point!
above.
The dungeon is over and I'll take two days off to adjust my status.
The next copy should also be an IP that everyone has seen, and it is still active today.
mwah.
Fighting antenna.
